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Tangled webs,
My soul hurts,
I think I’d rather never have loved, than loved & lost instead,
See, I’m depressed,
I walk through Central Station giving pennies to the ‘Walking Dead’,
I know that time flies,
Like that toy plane we built up & let fly from the high rise,
Mean guys are just the average,
Prepared to savagely damage anything remotely romantic,
I didn’t think I was one… You disagreed,
The break up was a long one… I doubt that you’ll be missing me,
Tangled Webs,
My soul hurts,
Sometimes I wish I’d never have loved, than loved & lost instead,
Secrets & lies,
I tried to stop the demise, of what began when I saw you cry,
Now that’s all there seems to be,
Raised voices or petty squabbles, just sitting in front of the TV,
No drink or drug binging,
Hanging out in clubs hinging, on drunk women
Ambition & passion has been,
Missing & lacking,
But the vision of you packing up your bags is distracting,
Tangled webs,
My soul hurts,
Mum’s wrong, I wish I’d never have loved than loved & lost instead,
See, green grass grows & weeds die,
You go from strength to strength; I’m straight from lie to lie,
I try to cry,
Can’t execute the liquid from my ducts I think I’m dead inside,
Our wires criss-crossed,
People look and say his loss, but this was,
A Tangled web with only one fly that gets caught,
So swallow me up & immerse me in guilt,
It’s worse to have lost love ‘cos you know how heartbreak felt.
© Craig Scott 2012
Little Lauren Logophile said:
I love the tempo of this piece. It bounces from line to line to lilting and lively line. Save for one, there’s one part that made me trip. I don’t know if you want critiques but the word “execute” in the sixth to last line derails it. Other than that, it’s lovely and filled to the brim with beautifully reawakened cliches.
dagdapublishing said:
Critiques are welcomed. Glad you enjoyed the piece 🙂
Craig Scott said:
Thank you, really appreciate your reply and you taking the time to have a look. Thank you to Dagda for publishing it online 🙂
stronghearted1 said:
Wonderful staccato to this piece and I love the refrain (Tangled webs,My soul hurts,)
This is a well written piece and for me this line is just stellar , one of those you wish you had written it lines….You go from strength to strength; I’m straight from lie to lie,
I try to cry,
craigscottpoet said:
Thank you very much, glad you liked the tempo and the content, appreciate your feedback, hopefully Dagda will give me the opportunity to publish some more at some point in the future 🙂
heydeezee said:
i really love this, it’s honest and beautiful